My essay talks about these following points:
- Bell hooks’ argument on how Paris is Burning acts as a medium of justifying white supremacy
- Bell hooks’ argument on how Livingston does not have the right to film a documentary about black queer culture
- My perspective on although Livingston might have ignored some details in the documentary that makes the balck audience uncomfortable, but her true intention is to help the underrepresented group.
- Strength:
- Includes different perspective from other articles to analyze and examine bell hooks’ argument
- Close-read specific examples from both Is Paris Burning? and Paris is Burning
- Possible improvements:
- Could add more transitions between paragraphs / ideas
- It makes sense to me but I’m not sure it makes sense to other people
- Could include more outside sources on how other people interpret bell hooks’ argument
- Cut down repeated wordings
- Could add more transitions between paragraphs / ideas
- Writing process
- Organizing all the ideas into paragraphs is definitely something I struggled the most
- I started writing the body paragraphs first, then the conclusion and the introduction
- In order to transition better from one paragraph to another, I should try writing my body paragraphs in order instead of jumping around during my writing process
- Skills I wish to learn more in the future
- Do more diverse type of close reading other than focusing on the diction
- How to connect one idea to another more coherently
- How to avoid run-on sentences