Shauna Kupershmidt- Midterm

 

Health and illness are both complex and broad terms that people understand differently based on a variety of disciplines such as culture, religion, profession, gender, and more. When we take into account culture and religion, there is so much overlap and simultaneously contradicting ideas between the two. As a member on the committee of ethics for Sasquatch hospital, I aim to take advantage of the fact that our hospital is now non-denominational. While it is important to value the predominant religion of the donor base (Irish Catholic), my aim is to encourage them to value the diverse religious demographic that this hospital will attract. We have patients from various religions and cultures including: Jews, Muslims, African Americans, and Japanese immigrants. It is crucial to delve deeply into the complications and foundations of both culture and religion in order to provide the best healthcare possible. As a member of the ethics committee, I will be focusing on similarities and differences between these two disciplines in order to form the most well-rounded policies and regulations while retaining the value and importance of the diverse background and history of this hospital, the patients, and the staff. Transition in regulation and policy is always challenging especially when it comes to sensitive and controversial topics.

Abortion is a procedure that is perceived very differently by individuals, and religion and culture play a large role for many individuals in their formulation of opinions on abortion. Since the Catholic church has recently allowed the hospital to become non-denominational, I believe this topic should be addressed through a more personalized, patient-care lens rather than a religious lens. In the book Contested Lives: The Abortion Debate in an American Community, author Faye D. Ginsburg looks at both the pro-life and pro-choice side of the abortion debate. Striking to me in this debate is that pro-life individuals believe that the foundation and cause of abortions are based on the idea that abortions are due to irresponsible choices such as unprotected sex. This misconception for the need for abortion makes understanding and regulating abortion policies difficult. Additionally, abortions can be very risky medical procedures and should be done only by doctors in a hospital. Our main goal as a hospital should be keeping patients as safe and healthy as possible. It is important to recognize that Ginsburg is analyzing abortion in America, a country with a multitude of religious and cultural backgrounds, which makes the abortion debate that much more challenging to address. We have talked extensively about control and the importance of having control of your own body. If women are unable to control what is happening to their body at one of the most vulnerable times in being pregnant, they lose that right. Furthermore, if they do not have the financial means of obtaining such control, they risk bringing in more people to this world that will also suffer their financial burden. As a hospital, we should not be endorsing potentially detrimental long-term implications. Donum Vitae emphasizes that as soon as the embryo forms, it should be regarded as a human being. For patients who view an embryo as a life from the moment of creation, we must respect this belief and give the patients control to move forward with their pregnancies. Similarly, the same choice should be given to those who believe otherwise. Many religions emphasize the importance of reproduction and see it as the woman’s role and sole purpose in life. Tsipy Ivry addresses pregnancy from an interesting cross-cultural, comparative perspective, focusing on geneticism versus environmentalism. There is so much cultural influence, almost to the point where it takes away the individualistic aspects of pregnancy. Because of the overpowering and contradictory influences when it comes to abortion, I believe individualism, control, and accessibility for the women should be prioritized over culture and religion when it comes to abortion.

In Vitro Fertilization (IVF) treatments and prenatal testing also should be considered with a woman’s control of her body except that it comes from a standpoint for creating a life rather than aborting one. Kinship and the way various groups understand it differently influence the implantation of IVF treatments. Depending on how we understand kinship, we are likely to support such treatments or fully contest them. For example, if we can understand kinship as strictly nuclear or consanguineal, IVF could have negative implications because we may not “know” who the father is. However, for our Jewish patients it is important we value their emphasis on reproduction and provide the means for them to be able to reproduce. In the chapter “Ethnography, Exegesis, and Jewish Ethical Reflection: The New Reproductive Technologies in Israel” author Don Seeman heavily focuses on the importance of reproductive technology in Israel. He points out a strong religious disagreement between Jews and Christians on the topic of “traditional” marriage and reproduction:

“There is no reason to deny that Jewish Orthodoxy today also holds up this kind of marriage as an ideal, but the halachic or Jewish legal grounding for claims about it permitted and forbidden reproductive practices begins not with Genesis but Leviticus, whose largely non-narrative focus on rules of consanguinity and rules of purity constitutes the main corpus of biblical kinship norms that underlie later Jewish family law. This simple fact is one of the reasons that Jewish law experts (passim) have tended to be so much more favorably inclined towards artificial reproductive technologies than many of their Christian counterparts, just as the State of Israel has been more supportive than many other Western states” (346).

This is a clear example of how impactful differences in interpretation of religion, law, and text can lead to drastically opposing perspectives on reproductive technology. In order to provide patients with equity in getting the kind of treatment they believe is right, we as a hospital will allow IVF for patients who wish to receive it. Fundamentally, our goals are to provide the best care for patients. If we deny our Jewish patients IVF, we are essentially ignoring one of their main beliefs which is accessibility to reproduce. However, as a hospital, we also have to be able to run as a business financially. We will not be subsidizing IVF treatment. While we respect patient’s religion and culture, there must be a level of personal accountability. One of my main goals is for patients to feel in control of their own decisions and beliefs, but we cannot always take responsibility for supporting that control financially. When it comes to abortion, there is not an effective alternative to value everyone’s beliefs besides granting them the procedure regardless of finances. In contrast, when it comes to reproducing and creating a family, based on certain kinship perspectives there are alternative ways to create a family such as adoption. As amniocentesis has the power to impact the mothers and baby’s health in a transformative way, we will subsidize this procedure on the premise that other standard tests show risk factors that would call for amniocentesis. When it comes to unused embryos, that is a personal decision for the patient and their family. If we are aiming to provide a well-rounded treatment approach, encouraging potentially counter-cultural and religious actions would promote the opposite from our end. In Geetz’ article, Geetz argues that there is a sense that culture is a mechanism that drives everything. However, in this case, I would stand by the idea that there are personal concerns that aren’t reducible to culture.

Social workers and genetic counselors will remain to be integral employees of our hospital. We will keep spiritual Catholic clergy, but we will also be adding representatives from all of our patient pool’s religions. This way we will simultaneously respect our donor group’s faith but also successfully broaden our policies and resources for our other patients. We will implement strict regulations for these employees in order not to impact negatively the patients’ care by interfering with the doctors. It will be optional for patients to seek counsel for their treatment, but the counselors will not be allowed to interact with the doctors directly. This will support the individualized control of the patients that we are aiming to attain and will allow the doctors to do their best work. The counseling services will be optional for the patients, and perhaps this optional service can alleviate some pressure and stress for the patients. For example, Japanese mothers who are more familiar with an environmental approach to medical practice may lack this approach in an American hospital. If they have access to some personalized guidance, they can experience a more fulfilling treatment. In the article “Does Submission to God’s Will Preclude Biotechnological Intervention?” author Sherine F. Hamdy focuses on organ transplant in Egypt among religious leaders, physicians, and patients. Hamdy emphasizes a strong ethical conflict that patients face with this procedure. While it is not directly linked to the rules of their religion, the story of the two men declining this procedure does stem from their connection with god. This dichotomy is complicated, and at scenarios like this, personalized religious/spiritual counseling could potentially provide critical support to the patients. There is a level of concern I have with bringing in various leaders in unintentionally creating extra tension and conflicts internally between the staff. I will address this by creating extensive training prior to bringing on the new team.

Lastly, managing staff under new regulations and policies results in challenging obstacles. For the nurses that are unwilling to perform these procedures, we will need to replace them. While the hospital used to be affiliated with the church, it is important to recognize and respect the separation. I hope that with respecting the beliefs of Catholic donors in other ways and by also respecting all of the various beliefs our patient pool brings in, the donors will be willing to increase the budget for new hires. We cannot move forward in respecting all patients’ values and beliefs if we have staff who is unwilling to cooperate. As one of my main goals is placing treatment in the patients’ control and making the treatment as individualized as possible, keeping the nurses who refuse care will counteract that entire effort. If there is no possible way to increase the budget, we will have to hold off hiring a new team of spiritual/religious counselors. While I believe this would be a very beneficial asset to our hospital, having cooperative nurses would take priority.

In efforts for the smoothest and most efficient transition, there should be full transparency between the donors, board, and physicians. If we want to implement new policies and regulations successfully, we will have to continuously respect and value everyone’s personal beliefs and focus on providing the best medical care we can.

6 Replies to “Shauna Kupershmidt- Midterm”

  1. Shauna,

    It is clear you have a solid understanding of the readings and therefore this has the potential to be a very strong, persuasive proposal. As of right now, it is difficult to read and is written in a very information-centric, instead of opinion-centric, manner. I think you need to establish your persona and clearly state your intentions for the hospital, which includes the degree of religious influence and the possibility of introducing ART. By doing this, you establish your points more clearly and will stay on topic better.

    The way you organized your body paragraphs was really good, as they focused on a single aspect of hospital policy. In each body paragraph, I found it quite difficult to tease out your core opinion and supporting arguments as there was so much extraneous, detailed information. Your main, persuading points don’t really begin until halfway into the paragraphs. In addition, you utilized a handful of readings but I felt that you spent way too much time summarizing them instead of using them to support your actual argument. My advice is to simply state your positions on each issue and then support that position with your opinions and the readings, which can be referenced without summaries or large block quotes.

    Generally speaking, I think your main idea was that the hospital is non-denominational and therefore it should reflect a diverse set of cultural ideals in its medical treatments. I totally agree with you on this but sometimes you deviate away from this argument and talk about the fact that women should have control over their body. This was a little distracting and somewhat confusing to read, making you less persuasive. I think you need to clarify your overall stance, whether that is hospital diversity or female control, and use that one concept to drive your individual, smaller arguments.

    In addition to the content, I think you need to give some attention to your grammar. To be specific, many of your sentence were run-ons and are too packed with information. By shortening your sentences, the reader will have an easier time understanding your explanations.

    Overall, you did a great job of getting your ideas on paper but it needs to be condensed and written more like a persuasive policy proposal, not an essay. Remember, you are on the committee to navigate/argue potential changes to hospital policy. Focus on clearly stating and then supporting your ideas, without including too much “big picture” or overly detailed information.

    I hope my notes help! Good luck!

  2. Hello Shauna,

    One of the biggest issues with your midterm, to me, is that you do not cited sources from class readings. When you paraphrase the authors thoughts or ideas, you must cite the author. This is technically plagiarism. You paraphrase a lot in your essay. This should be one of the first corrections you make. This will help give you a strong argument. I feel it’s hard of me to fully grasp your proposal.  In addition, I believe the use of quotes can help explain your point more. For example, you stated, “Striking to me in this debate is that pro-life individuals believe that the foundation and cause of abortions are based on the idea that abortions are due to irresponsible choices such as unprotected sex.” You should back generalizing claims with quotes. 

    I think your essay could use improvement to its structure. For example, the goal of your hospital is scattered throughout your midterm. In my opinion, a proposal should state important information (like hospitals goals) before getting into the argument. The people your presenting to should know what you are trying to achieve (goals), and then explain your reasons for your decisions. The restructuring of your essay will make it easier to read, and will help clarify your argument. 

    In your essay you stated, “As a member of the ethics committee, I will be focusing on similarities and differences between these two disciplines in order to form the most well-rounded policies and regulations while retaining the value and importance of the diverse background and history of this hospital, the patients, and the staff.”  You refer to religion and culture as a “disciplines”. Maybe, I am wrong, but I usually do not thing of religion as a discipline. I usually refer to religion being made up of multiple disciplines. For example, Christianity (religion) is composed of Protestant and Catholic disciplines. The same thing applies to culture. I think changing the word will clear confusion. 

    Also, you have grammatical errors throughout your paper. Church should be capitalized when referring to Catholic Church. This might me being picky but you use words like “very” to emphasize your point. This would can be removed and still get the point across. 

  3. Hello Shauna,

    While I think I understand your argument and the points you have made, I am going to have to reject and disagree with your proposal. One of the biggest issues with your proposal, to me, is that you do not cited sources from class readings. When you paraphrase the authors thoughts or ideas, you have to cite the author. This is technically plagiarism in a academic setting. You paraphrase a lot in your essay. This should be one of the first corrections if you intend to propose again. This will help give you a strong argument. In addition,I believe the use of quotes can help explain your point more. For example, you stated, “Striking to me in this debate is that pro-life individuals believe that the foundation and cause of abortions are based on the idea that abortions are due to irresponsible choices such as unprotected sex.” You should back strong claims with quotes. Mainly for this reason, I will have to disagree with your argument.

    In addition, I think your essay could use improvement to its structure. This made it hard for me to understand your entire argument. For example, the goal of your hospital is scattered throughout your midterm. In my opinion, a proposal should state important information (like hospitals goals) before getting into the argument. The people your presenting to should know what you are trying to achieve (goals), and then explain your reasons for your decisions. The restructuring of your essay will make it easier to read, and will help clarify your argument.

    In your essay you stated, “ As a member of the ethics committee, I will be focusing on similarities and differences between these two disciplines in order to form the most well-rounded policies and regulations while retaining the value and importance of the diverse background and history of this hospital, the patients, and the staff.” You refer to religion and culture as a “disciplines”. Maybe, I am wrong, but I usually do not thing of religion as a disciplines. I usually refer to religion being made up of multiple disciplines. For example, Christianity (religion) is composed of Protestant and Catholic disciplines. The same thing applies to culture. I thing changing the word will clear confusion.

    Finally, you have grammatical errors throughout your paper. Church should be capitalized when referring to Catholic Church. This might me being picky but you use words like “very” to emphasize your point. This would can be removed and still get the point across. Improvement to these problems can potentially sway my vote.

  4. Hi Shauna, Garrett and Grace,

    Shauna, this is well-written and fairly persuasive. However, I would like to see you account better for your basic commitments, such as the idea that individual choice ought to be paramount. Would you say the same about decisions to terminate those who children have already been born? Will your hospital provide euthanasia services etc?

    Grace and Garett both gave excellent, detailed recommendations and I encourage you to consider them carefully. Especially the part about citations from the readings, which is crucial. It would be a good idea to ask one or both of them to read through your next draft and see whether their concerns have been met.

    I will note here a couple of specific passages I had problems with.

    1. As a hospital, we should not be endorsing potentially detrimental long-term implications. I do not understand this sentence. Can one endorse an implication? Make clear what you are trying to say.

    2. This misconception for the need for abortion makes understanding and regulating abortion policies difficult.– How do you know this is a misconception? What is the truth in your view?

    3. I will be focusing on similarities and differences between these two disciplines… [Which two? If you mean culture and religion, these are not disciplines, but facets of the human condition.

    4. In Vitro Fertilization (IVF) treatments and prenatal testing also should be considered with a woman’s control of her body except that it comes from a standpoint for creating a life rather than aborting one.

    This sentence is just a bit confusing and needs to be cleaned up. What do you mean “considered with a women’s control of her body”?

    5. Many religions emphasize the importance of reproduction and see it as the woman’s role and sole purpose in life. — Which religions? I am not aware of any.

    Feel free to come chat at well. This is a great start and it can be made much better in time for the final.

    best
    DS

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